Monday, 22 October 2012

YA entry #8 - FADE INTO YOU

Name: Kelly Allan
Title: FADE INTO YOU
Genre: YA Contemporary
Word count: 85,000

Hook:

Kenzie, a drifter who resists friends, meets Mags, a mentally unstable Valedictorian. Mags needs a live-in caregiver who can keep her from hurting herself and her unborn baby—Kenzie’s ex-boyfriend's baby. A deep-seeded and unexpected friendship forces Kenzie to choose between living carefree and staying to face demons that aren’t just her own.

Line:

The gray atmosphere of Indianapolis was sticky and stifling, especially after our frequent relocations between small towns, where the skies were usually a clear blue during the day and, at night, a spectacle of stars.

Sinker:

I didn’t even wait for the car to stop all the way before I pushed myself from its confines to stretch my legs and inhale some fresh air into my lungs. Mom and I had been on the road for a day and a half and I suffered from a deranged case of cabin fever.

The gray atmosphere of Indianapolis was sticky and stifling, especially after our frequent relocations between small towns, where the skies were usually a clear blue during the day and, at night, a spectacle of stars. This city was a stark contrast to where we’d lived in California, where everyone overdosed on daily vitamin C and salty ocean water. Indianapolis felt dirty, especially the dull brown buildings populating the worn streets, and they made me rethink our move to the big city as I dashed passed them.

My shoes slapped against the pavement with an uneven cadence, one of my legs had cramped up from the tight corners of the car, and I hoped running would loosen it. I sprinted at first—glad to be free of our blue Volkswagen that had begun to smell of body odor and old food—then slowed into a steady pace, feeling my heart pump heavily under my thin blouse. I ran and I ran and I ran, past dormant street lamps, crumbled driveways, and toddler toys abandoned on the sidewalks. Running was my way of christening a place. It was my ritual. A new house, a new town, wasn’t home to me until I ran there.


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1 comment:

  1. Boy, what a tangled web we weave. I'm interested! Please paste into the body of your email: your cover letter, synopsis and first three chapters, and send to: Submissions(at)akaliteraryllc(dot)com. In the subject heading please state: HL&S - Requested by Terrie - with your entry number.

    Many thanks,
    Terrie

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