Monday, 22 October 2012

YA entry #7 - THE GIRL WHO SLEPT IN THE POET'S EAR

Name: Kip Wilson Rechea
Title: THE GIRL WHO SLEPT IN THE POET’S EAR
Genre: YA Historical/Magical Realism
Word Count: 60,000

Hook:

During World War I, sixteen-year-old ballerina Wera dreams of dancing her way into immortality on the Munich Opera House stage. When a mysterious illness steals her ability to dance, she seizes the chance to gain the immortality she so desires in a way she never expected—as the poet Rilke’s muse.

Line:

The fragrance grew closer until it seemed to emanate from my own skin—as if petals had implanted themselves deep in my hair, their silkiness blooming on top of my head.

Sinker:

Stealing a glance behind me, I hurried past the bombed-out block of storefronts. I needn’t have worried—the sidewalks of Munich stood empty and forlorn. The sound of my heels on the cobblestones echoed along the narrow street, each hollow step making me painfully aware of how alone I was.

My pace slowed as a thick fog of images swirled through my head, threatening to solidify. I came to a halt, making myself focus on the rubble from the bombing earlier this week instead. As I watched, a tendril of smoke extended through the hazy air and over the sidewalk, where it brushed my cheek like a bony finger. I squeezed my eyes shut. Even the danger from falling bombs couldn’t compare to the images that often came alive in my head, more vivid—and more terrifying—than any reality.

The Frauenkirche’s bells chimed the hour. I had to hurry. I stepped away from the smoke and picked up speed again, turning the corner. Just a few more blocks and I’d arrive at Frau Schneider’s makeshift ballet studio.

“Hi, Wera!” A flash of red caught my eye against the colorless backdrop of gray and white and black. Anna. I exhaled my relief. She wore the scarf I’d given her two years ago for her fourteenth birthday, when we were still allowed to knit with colored yarn. When we were still allowed to knit for civilians.


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4 comments:

  1. Hi Kip. This looks great! I'd love to see a synopsis and the first 50 pages as a word attachment. Please send to eharris [at] foliolit.com. Looking forward!

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  2. Hi Amanda! Really intriguing premise, and I'd love to see more. Please send the full to susan(at)thebentagency(dot)com, and attach as a word doc. Also include HLS Contest in the subject line. Many thanks, I can't wait to read this! Susan

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  3. I love the language here, and I'm dying for a good WWI story. Please email the full manuscript, a synopsis, and your query to me at brooks(at)fineprintlit(dot)com, with "HLS Requested Material" in the subject line. Looking forward to seeing the rest!

    Brooksishly,
    me

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  4. I can't get this out of my mind. I'd love to see more. Please paste into the body of your email: your cover letter, synopsis and first three chapters, and send to: Submissions(at)akaliteraryllc(dot)com. In the subject heading please state: HL&S - Requested by Terrie - with your entry number.

    Looking forward,
    Terrie

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