Monday, 22 October 2012

YA entry #5 - THE UNFORTUNATE WISHES OF MATTHEW WATSON

Name: Austin Light
Title: THE UNFORTUNATE WISHES OF MATTHEW WATSON
Genre: YA Contemporary/supernatural (not romance)
Word count: 79,000

Hook:

Former private schooler, Matt, uses an aloof genie to get out of his crappy bully-filled public school. But the genie doesn’t use magic; he “makes things happen,” which apparently translates to “ruins everything.” Now Matt’s scrambling to fix his life, avoid a bully and woo a girl, all while his genie is setting buildings on fire for funsies.

Line:

He glanced at Jonah, standing on the toilet with a bewildered look on his face, and checked off "hearing people's thoughts," from his list of possible wishes--that was like a punch to the soul.

Sinker:

Two inches.

That's all that separated Matt's face from toilet water. Used toilet water.

“Give it to me! I know you have it,” said the surprisingly strong boy holding Matt’s neck.

“I don’t have anything, please…” Matt squeaked.

“You do, I know you do.”

And he did. Why wouldn’t he have his homework? Matt had a perfect completion record; every assignment turned in on time since the first grade—a record ten years running. Handing over his homework meant breaking the streak, and he was already passed the halfway point in his pre-college education. If the thug holding him hostage wanted homework, he’d have to get it from someone else.

But the smell. Dear god the smell.

It was like warm liquefied garbage. Poured from a human into a slimy porcelain dumpster. In essence, shit.

“I can let you up. We don’t have to do it this way. You’re making it worse for yourself. Just give it to me.”

“You…you don’t even know me!” Matt whimpered.

The age old you don’t know me argument. Matt had seen it used on talk shows, bad movies, and even hallway disagreements in this very school. It seemed to be a popular retort to any type of insult or threat, he thought he’d give it a shot here—anything to get me out of this toilet. A polite person would at least give a proper introduction before trying to dunk someone’s face in a dirty toilet bowl.

“Oh, I know you.”


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2 comments:

  1. Eek...this is tough for me...a little off my beaten track. Still, I love the voice. Would love to see: your cover letter, synopsis and first three chapters.Send to: Submissions(at)akaliteraryllc(dot)com. In the subject heading please state: HL&S - Requested by Terrie - with your entry number.

    Thanks!
    Terrie

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  2. I think this book sounds like a hoot! Great writing.

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