Saturday, 13 October 2012

Hook, Line & Sinker - NOW CLOSED TO SUBMISSIONS!

**Agents who aren't participating as part of our line-up are welcome to make requests, but please wait until October 25th, AFTER the contest closes.**

The contest is now closed to Young Adult submissions. We are FULL! Check out the entries below, and feel free to mosey on over to look through the Adult and MG entries, too.

*Your entry must include the following: Name, title, genre & subgenre, e-mail, hook, & line. Read guidelines post here.

Hook: A pitch for your novel of up to 3 sentences (maximum of 60 words).

Line: One line from your manuscript that showcases your writing. *One sentence only and no run-ons.

*This blog is accepting Young Adult entries, up to a maximum of 75. The submission window will close at 5pm EDT, or when we reach the maximum number of entries. In the event that more than 75 submissions are posted due to an influx of entries, the additional entries will be removed and we'll close the comments until we have the 75 confirmed entries.

*Comments are accepted and encouraged in this round, but please wait until the submission window closes to post them. Comments must be positive and constructive. Anything discouraging or inappropriate will be deleted. If you are unable to see a new comment you have posted, please try clicking 'load more' at the bottom of the page. Some browsers won't allow more than 200 comments to appear on blogger - I'm sorry about this, but please be assured your comments ARE posting, and any entrants who ask for their entry's comments will have them emailed to them at the end of the contest.

365 comments:

  1. Name: Michelle Hauck
    Title: Dodge the Sun
    Genre: YA Fantasy-Dystopian
    Email: Michelle9Hauck(at)aol(dot)com

    Hook: They didn’t have nursery-rhyming cannibals or super-sized possums on her farm—only cows. A deteriorating shield forces Little Bit to evade lethal radiation from the sun while she searches for New Chicago. Oh, and the mage back home forgot to mention she isn’t a hero, or even human—she started life as a rabbit.


    Line: Better to be a corpse brought back to life, a Frankenstein’s monster of bits and pieces.

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  2. Name: Ranee` S. Clark
    Title: BLOOM
    Genre: YA Contemporary Fantasy
    Email: raneesclark(at)yahoo(dot)com

    Hook: The man everyone thinks is saving the Enchanter kingdom isn't. The girl no one believes can will have to. The boy she hates is her best chance at success.

    Line: “Fiana is a Claremont, so if you mean shot like a bullet to the head, she’d take that before she’d take you.”

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  3. Name: Mia K Rose
    Title: Of Fire and Shadow
    Genre: YA Urban Fantasy
    Email: miakrose(at)gmail(dot)com
    Hook: 16yr old Talitha's body turns into smoke, and for two battling factions she is of prime interest. Both want her to locate a vessel that can turn the tide of battle for either side. One grants her control over her power, the other will save her friend.

    Line: The cacophony of whispers in my mind, these alien yet familiar thoughts overwhelmed coherency.

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    1. love your hook very interesting and with lots of conflict. Good luck!

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  4. Name: Triona Murphy
    Title: The Long-Timers
    Genre: YA Sci-fi Thriller
    Email: triona.b.murphy(at)gmail(dot)com
    Hook: A drug that prolongs life by 200 years has split society into the long-timers who can afford it and the short-timers who would do anything for a few extra years.

    Seventeen-year-old Remy's parents invented the drug—but when he finds out its horrific source, Remy has to decide if a few hundred years can possibly be worth the price.

    Line: My uncle was only 152 when he died, but five hundred people showed up for his funeral anyway.

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    1. I would read this! It sounds very cool.

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    2. Love the premise. Sounds creepy and all too realistic.

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  5. Name: Kip Wilson Rechea
    Title: The Girl Who Slept in the Poet’s Ear
    Genre: YA historical/magical realism
    Email: kiperoo(at)gmail(dot)com
    Hook: During World War I, sixteen-year-old ballerina Wera dreams of
    dancing her way into immortality on the Munich Opera House stage. When
    a mysterious illness steals her ability to dance, she seizes the
    chance to gain the immortality she so desires in a way she never
    expected—as the poet Rilke’s muse.
    Line: The fragrance grew closer until it seemed to emanate from my own
    skin—as if petals had implanted themselves deep in my hair, their
    silkiness blooming on top of my head.

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    1. Oh, Kip! How is it that your aren't already repped and published? I am a fan of you for life, having read those beautiful words! Especially that line!! So beautiful. It fills me with things for which there are no words. I am swooning for more... I think you've left us all behind with this one!

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    2. I have to agree...this is a very beautiful line.

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  6. Name: Lynne Schmidt
    Title: After Elizabeth
    Genre: YA Contemporary
    Word Count: 61,000
    Email: sschmidt1026 (at) gmail (dot) com

    Hook: In the aftermath of her best friend’s suicide, good-girl Claire Davis has taken to chain smoking, fist fighting at school, skipping classes, quitting her beloved cross country team, and generally flipping her middle finger to the world. Content with self imposed loneliness, each day Claire runs away from her problems. Until she meets her new neighbor, who won’t go away.
    Line: If I don’t exist to Claire Davis, maybe I’m not real.

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  7. Name: Jeanmarie Anaya
    Title: OPERATION BREAKUP
    Genre: Contemporary YA
    Email: janaya75(at)hotmail(dot)com

    Hook: Crushing on the hottest senior in school who already has the perfect girlfriend is a lose-lose situation for sixteen-year-old wallflower Abby Wheeler. So when a shady frenemy with similar woes proposes “Operation Breakup”—a risky plan for attaining the unattainable, Abby takes the gamble. But the plan is far from foolproof and has social suicide written all over it.

    Line: Ian called Phase Three of Operation Breakup the “jealousy experiment,” and it sounded as smart as jumping into a pool of sharks wearing a raw hamburger bathing suit.

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    2. Love the premise of this book! (I said the same thing in my comment above, but it might have been a bit too early--oops.)

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    3. I've seen this a few other contests and absolutely love your voice. You do an awesome job conveying both of the characters' personalities in a few short sentences! Good luck!

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    4. I remember this from GUTGAA! Memorable in a good way :) Can't wait to see your sinker.

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  8. Name: Anabel Gonzalez
    Title: Glowing Shadow
    Genre: YA paranormal romance
    Word count: 81,000
    Email: anacasamadrid(at)hotmail(dot)com

    Hook: Eighteen-year-old empath Muriel thinks being a genius broadcasting her feelings to everyone is the biggest curse possible -- until she moves to Madrid. There, strange shadows hunt her; she’s rescued by a stubborn man who transforms into a glowing shadow. Now she has to convince him he deserves to love her while they discover why the shadows want her soul.

    Line: "What you make me feel, this intense desire," he said, moving his face closer to mine, "devours me alive in a strange fire that’s impossible to control."

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  9. Name: Veronica Bartles
    Title: Kissing Frogs
    Genre: YA Contemporary
    Email: veronica(at)vbartles(dot)com

    Hook: After escaping a rape attempt by a close friend, seventeen-year-old Alaina is afraid of boys. When one she might love steals a not-so-innocent kiss, she’s afraid to trust herself, but the “best friend” she turns to for advice is more interested in controlling than helping her. If Alaina doesn’t learn to listen to her heart, she may never trust anyone.
    Line: He told me that he would protect me and keep me “out of harm’s way,” and then he proceeded to call Kendra “Harm” for the rest of the night.

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    1. A very serious topic you don't see handled often enough.

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  10. Name: Stacey Nash
    Title: Forget-me-not
    Genre: YA Science Fiction
    Email: contact(at)staceynash(dot)com

    Hook: Seventeen-year-old Anamae finds her missing mother’s pendant, she puts it on and discovers it’s a piece of technology that makes the wearer invisible. Triggering the pendant’s true purpose attracts the attention of The Collective, a secret society sworn to suppress technology so advanced it could be straight from science fiction movies. Now she’s on the top of their hit list.

    Line: “Discovering that everything you believed to be fiction is actually real makes a person a little inquisitive.”

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    1. Oh, I love invisibility! That's the super-power at the top of my Super-Powers-to-Have list. This sounds very interesting. Good luck!

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    2. I think this one sounds really cool. Definitely not writing to trends - which is refreshing. Nice.

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  11. Name: Stacey Trombley
    Title: WHISPERS OF DISASTER
    Genre: YA Fantasy
    Email: SPtrombley88(at)aol(dot)com

    Hook: Constant whispers and rumors lead Taylor to a desperate search for answers. Digging into her father's past gets her an inside look at a mysterious group-- but they're more than just a cult, they're a powerful race ordained to cause disasters to the world. She refuses to join them and finds herself on the run, hunted by her own family.

    Line: The forest was the only place Taylor felt peaceful, content, the trees never gave her dirty looks or whispered nasty things--the forest didn't have secrets.

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    1. I like your premise, it sounds really interesting. It may just be me, but '...cause disasters to the world' sounds odd to me. I might have written it '...cause disasters in the world' or maybe '...around the world'. Otherwise, it sounds great.

      Best of luck!

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  12. Name: Katherine Ernst and Chelle Bruhn
    Title: Veiled
    Genre: YA Sci-Fi
    Email: kernstwriter(at)gmail(dot)com

    Hook: In Eskifalia, when a woman’s skin is exposed to the touch of a man, biology dictates that she’s forced to take on the personality he desires. A thin veil is all that stands between Aveza and having her mind enslaved by her betrothed. Her sister burned herself alive to avoid the same fate, but Aveza has a different plan.

    Line: The bride’s wrist was still bound to her groom’s with the red cord, and as he raised their entwined hands for all to see, blood streamed down their forearms and splashed onto the elaborate gown.

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    1. Must read! I must read! WEll DONE!!

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    2. Oooo! Love this! Does Aveza find a way to be with her betrothed and not be enslaved? Or does she decide not to get married?

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  13. Name: Axie Oh
    Title: The Lights in the Sky are Stars
    Genre: YA Fantasy
    Email: Gdkgents(at)gmail(dot)com
    Hook: When terminally ill, sixteen-year old Evie Browning gets transported to Gaea, a world with two moons hanging in the sky, embroiled in a centuries long war between sister Queens, she must decide whether to return to Earth and meet her fate or remain on Gaea and live forever.
    Line: ‘It’s not a choice I should make,’ he wanted to say to her, ‘because as it is, I’d save you, and only you, for everything I do is for you and for every broken breath that rattles in your throat, I die a thousand deaths.’

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    1. Love this hook! It sounds interesting, and right away I want to know about the sister Queens and their war and what role Evie will play. I'm really curious to see what choice she'd make, too... forever is a long time.

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    2. It's an intriguing premise. I love - 'for every broken breath that rattles in your throat'. I'm curious about the two moons and the sister queens and wondering if they're connected.

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  14. Name: K.L. Layton
    Title: Watch Her
    Genre: YA supernatural
    Word Count: 76,000
    Email: kl_layton(at)hotmail(dot)com

    Hook: Seventeen-year-old Shannon doesn’t know she’s meant to save the world. She doesn’t know Ira, her guardian Angel who she can’t see, wards off demons meant to assassinate her. She only knows that she wants to slit her wrists because dealing with a breakup with the boy of her dreams and the death of her mother are too much to handle.

    Line: "Maybe it felt like forever before he felt the force of the truck slam into the solid 100 year old pine."

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  15. Name: Tamara Mataya
    Title: MOONDREAMER: The Sowing
    Genre: YA Urban Fantasy
    Email: tamarapederson(at)hotmail(dot)com
    Hook:Syxx is a Moondreamer, she can grant wishes and will things into being. When the Fae Council manipulates her into attending a Fae breeding ceremony, she has three options: Submit (no!), die (hell no!), or overthrow the system.
    Line: I sag like a ninety-five-year-old breast.

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    2. Oops, I'm one of those eager posters who jumped the gun... what I originally said went something like this...

      I'm... I... you... you slay me! Your 'line' alone makes me want to read this book. I love it when a book makes me laugh, or cry. This 'line' might make me laugh until I cry! Fan-FREAKIN'-tastic!
      Good luck.

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  16. Name: Pat Esden
    Title: MOONHILL
    Genre: YA Contemporary Gothic
    Email: PatEsden (at) gmail (dot) com

    Hook: In a gothic tale of love and revenge, a teenage antique picker allies with estranged family to save her beloved father from the grip of dementia. But the danger isn’t what it seems and it’ll take more than her shrewd bargaining skills or the help of a stealthy security guard to rescue her father from this otherworldly brand of crazy.

    Line: I switched the headlights to low beam and squinted through the shifting mist, struggling to read the road signs as villages and scattered streetlights transformed into an arched canopy of rain-soaked trees, then nothing except ghosting fog and darkness.

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    1. your sentence gave me chillsand the hook is intriguing. Good luck!

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  17. Name: Rachel Lynn Solomon
    Title: RIP HER TO SHREDS
    Genre: YA contemporary
    Email: rachel.l.solomon(at)gmail(dot)com

    Hook:

    Singer Charlie escapes a summer of trying to get her crush to realize all her songs are about him when her all-girl band the Wretched Gretchens goes on tour. But wild shows and parties also isolate Charlie from her bandmates as she struggles with what binds them beyond catchy hand-clap choruses — and what happens when they get home.

    Line:

    He held her while the crows barked a song in the sky above them, while the wind whispered against their bare arms, while she cried.

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  18. Name: Amanda Foody
    Title: ACE OF SHADES
    Genre: YA Steampunk Fantasy
    Email: akfoody(at)gmail(dot)com
    Hook: Seventeen-year-old Enne Alfero roams the magical Victorian-like shadow world searching for her lost mother. Her only ally is Levi Glaisyer, a hot street lord and card dealer at a casino. When the casino’s owner tricks Enne with an unbreakable vow to work as an assassin, Enne and Levi must play the city’s politicians in a deadly game for their lives.

    Line: Lourdes always told me that if she was missing for two weeks, she was dead; it’s been four.

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    1. I feel like I'm THERE even in just the few sentences of your hook! Such a cool premise.

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    2. Your words choices are brilliant--street lords, card dealers, assassins, politicians, unbreakable vows. Just with the words you've built a world!

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    3. I agree with Rlynn-Solomon. And I like your title :)

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  19. NAME: FIONA MCLAREN
    TITLE: OVERTOUN BRIDGE
    GENRE: YA GOTHIC HORROR
    WORD COUNT: 60,000 words
    EMAIL: freelance_writer_fm(at)hotmail(dot)com

    HOOK: The Picture of Dorian Gray meets Labyrinth for teens. When seventeen-year-old Dillan's friend is sucked through the stonework of Overtoun Bridge and into a terrifying labyrinth run by Jack the Ripper, Dillan decides to plunge after her. When he does, he discovers he has more than serial killers to deal with, because there is someone trying to steal his soul.

    LINE: They say a man threw his baby off the Overtoun Bridge.

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    1. Oooh, sounds terrifyingly wonderful. Can't wait to pick this one up at my local B&N! Maybe I'll get lucky and be able to get it signed by the author ;)

      LOVE the line.

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    2. Sounds really creepy and fun!

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  20. Name: Tamara Walsh
    Title: Against the Falling Moons
    Genre: YA light fantasy romance
    Word count: 95,000
    Email: tamaradwalsh@yahoo.com

    Hook:
    On Luc’s sixth birthday his best friend Auri falls through a rip in Trillua and disappears into a parallel world—Earth. Somehow, Luc’s able to watch Auri grow up in his dreams. At sixteen, he risks his life to travel to Earth to rescue her, but Auri’s built a new life—one with no room for the boy she’s forgotten.

    Line:
    Kissing Luc feels like a hundred doors swinging open inside me—all of them full of sunlight.

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  21. Name: Aurelia Blue
    Title: The Unicorn Princess
    Genre: YA Romantic Fantasy
    Email:aurelia_blue(at)yahoo(dot)com
    Hook: Leilani, seventeen, and late blooming human transmorphogrif, is anxiously waiting to morph into a unicorn. But after one date with hunky ,unicorn heartthrob, App, this daughter of a unicorn dad and supposed mortal mom, unexpectedly becomes a mermaid, and heir to an archaic, patriarchal, Mer kingdom located in the depths of Lake Michigan. Can their love and her self-identity survive?
    Line: "Oh, she's just fine," Mandy says apathetically from the closet, "just a little worked up because she drank some sardine juice for breakfast, right in front of your super sexy Appopotamus."

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  22. Name: Tristina Wright
    Title: Children of the Gods
    Genre: YA Steampunk/Mythology (Mythpunk)
    Email: tristina(at)tristinawright(dot)com

    Hook: I met her at a masquerade. I kissed her at a carnival. I fell in love with her at an execution.

    Line: I raked my hands through my hair and down my face, wishing I could claw out the hurt and emptiness and throw it into the water.

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    1. Want. This is an amazing sounding book. I don't usually read YA and want it NOW. Haha! Good luck!!

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  23. Name: Ellen Rozek
    Title: The Recruited
    Genre: YA thriller
    Word Count: 76,000
    Email: ellenmrozek@gmail.com

    Hook: Recruited by the government to help fight Renegade terrorists, Naomi must keep her growing friendship with a gang member a secret from her employers—and the Renegades themselves—if both of them are to survive.

    Line: As soon as Naomi was inside they were gone, speeding away from the Renegades, the street thugs, and the boy who’d helped her for reasons she couldn’t begin to understand.

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  24. Name: Kendra Young
    Title: A Girl Called Graye
    Genre: YA Paranormal Steampunk
    Email: kendra_young1(at)comcast(dot)net

    Hook: Graye has never gazed at hovering miniature dirigibles, ridden magnificent clockwork dragons, or wrestled misunderstood man-eating houseplants. All that changes when tragedy forces Graye into the hidden world of the Lasár, known as vampires to Daytimer folk. As centuries of deception unfold, Graye must decide what – or who – she’s willing to sacrifice to save those she loves in both worlds.

    Line: “It was beautiful chaos woven together in a dance-like cadence of bronze, steel, and steam.”

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  25. Name: Jean M. Malone
    Title: Danny Boy
    Genre: YA Contemporary
    Email: jean(dot)m(dot)malone(at)gmail(dot)com

    Hook: When 17-year-old Daniel’s father breaks his promise to abandon their nomadic lives as a Renaissance Faire band, Daniel vows to give his younger brothers the home he’s longed for, until the tragic consequences of his actions force him to reevaluate his concept of home.

    Line: How can you love something about a person, and hate them for it all at the same time?

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    1. I love the Renaissance Faire concept. What does Daniel do that causes the tragic consequences? Is there any way to be more specific?

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  26. Name: Laura Keller
    Title: Mixed Signals
    Genre: YA Romance/Magical Realism
    Email: jeffnlaurakeller(at)everestkc(dot)net

    Hook: Marin’s never even heard of synesthesia—mixed senses—until she meets Daniel. Now she’s beyond fascinated with the way he perceives everything around him: smelling names, seeing auras, tasting touch. But as she begins to fall in love with him, she finds a connection so deep that it might literally change the way she perceives the world—forever.

    Line: If she’d been named Carol, for instance, I’d be living with the aroma of plywood with a hint of putrid varnish much of the time.

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    1. Love the sensory details in your hook, and this premise sounds great. Good luck!

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  27. Name: G.B. Skye
    Title: Isle in the Sea of Ghosts
    Genre: YA Contemporary/Supernatural
    Email: GBSkye.dwta(at)gmail(dot)com

    Hook: 17-year-old Blair is comatose, his body hospitalized and his soul trapped in limbo after a botched suicide attempt. A dead girl named Yuki promises to help him wake if he takes her back with him, but he must battle lost souls, monsters, and death itself to free her. Success will restore her life--failure will cost his soul.

    Line: Anyone who chooses to hide behind a fox mask is probably not someone you ought to trust, at least not if you're remotely familiar with the fox archetype as trickster--and let's face it, if you're not familiar with this archetype, you either a) live in a cave or b) have the formidable intelligence of a potted plant.

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    1. The line sold me on this one. Wasn't much for the hook, to be honest, but loved the writing in the line. :-)

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    2. Yes! I love the Japanese influences and the whole reality of the book taking place in limbo. Have your read Dragon Sword and Wind Child by Noriko Ogiwara? I adore dreamscape fantasies.

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    3. Girl with Bread--I haven't read that one, but I looked it up and it sounds fantastic! I've added it to my read list. Thanks for the rec!!

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  28. Name: Ian Hiatt
    Title: GUARDIAN
    Genre: YA Urban Fantasy
    Email: ihiatt(at)relicsofprovidence(dot)com

    Hook: Seventeen year old Gabriel Murdoch is not losing his mind—at least that's what he tells himself. But seeing the girl you're falling in love with die every time you fall asleep can't be healthy. As the attempts on her life get more desperate in the real world, Gabriel has to ask: will he be the one to kill her?

    Line: Sometimes the only way to survive among damaged people is to damage yourself.

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    1. Love the premise of this book!

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    2. I LOVE that line. Interesting premise as well. Good luck!

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    3. *tip of the hat* Thank you for the kind words, folks! :)

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    4. I like your premise.
      Good Luck

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  29. Name: Annette Tremblay
    Title: Sticks and Stones
    Genre: YA Urban Fantasy
    Email: annettetremblay(at)gmail(dot)com

    Hook: Piper has been training for years to diplomatically kick butt, but her first shot at responsibility doesn’t exactly impress. A deadly magical artifact goes missing right under her nose—and she’s accused of stealing it. She needs help finding the thieving jerks who framed her, but her only options are two shifty, inhuman daemons just as dangerous as her enemies.

    Line: She froze under his stare, hardly daring to breathe as he seemed to look right through her, taking her apart piece by piece, reading her soul underneath.

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  30. Name: Jani Grey
    Title: Those Who Can’t Speak
    Genre: YA Urban Fantasy
    Word count: 83,000
    Email: jani.grey(@)hotmail(.)com

    Hook:
    Seventeen-year-old Cadence has a tough job keeping her city and its residents safe from the Saints and Prophets held prisoner inside. When somebody starts de-spiriting the city’s people on her watch, she has to work fast to catch the culprit while the prison walls start to crumble, or watch everyone she cares about fall victim to the madman behind it.

    Line:
    “It’s like we’ve been sitting on the lying bench this whole time and the only things we can say to each other is anything but the truth.”

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    1. I love this line you chose!
      Well, I love this entire story and you know that ;) So, so good! <3
      Goo luck!

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    2. That line got me. The honesty it causes to well up in my heart reading it... it's awesome.

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  31. Name: Debbie Causevic
    Title: Tumbling After, Book One of The Timebender’s Curse Trilogy
    Genre: YA, Time-Travel/Romance
    Email: dcausevic(at)yahoo(dot)com

    Hook: When a centuries-old curse sends teen Liza Weatherby to 1860’s Williamsburg, she can’t resist falling in love with charismatic Owen Hayes, an apprentice to her family’s mortal enemy. Unfortunately, her efforts to reach him after they are unexpectedly separated back through time might be the very catalyst that initiates the family curse in the first place.

    Line: “It isn’t the where that’s causing your sister to have such a hard time coping, child; it’s the when.”

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    1. I think this sounds intriguing. Good Luck

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  32. Name: Beck Nicholas
    Title: Fake
    Genre: YA Contemporary
    Email: Beck(dot)Nicholas(at)hotmail(dot)com

    Hook:
    When 16-year-old Kath McKenny is publicly dumped, seducing the boyfriend-stealing new girl with a fake online guy seems like the perfect revenge. Until Kath falls for her victim’s brother. When the new girl goes missing, Kath’s the only one with the answers, but the truth could cost her both her new boyfriend and her deepest secret.

    Line: My humiliation is complete.

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  33. Name: Leslie Hauser
    Title: Hope in Bloom
    Genre: YA Contemporary
    Email: LHauser27(at)gmail(dot)com

    Hook: Desperate for a moment of hope, eighteen-year-old Mallory decides playing the lottery is the ticket to erasing the misery that surrounds her at home and at school. And although her plan delivers the joy of a picture-perfect fantasy world, Mallory’s real life grows more problematic with each new set of numbers.


    Line: “Smiles and whispers of ‘good luck’ travel from one set of lips to another down the line that wraps around the store, and a dinner table is set for strangers to share their stories and hopes with one another.”

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    1. I love this concept -- it's unique yet relatable. Your line is fantastic, too. What a great visual! Good luck!

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  34. Name: Abby Annis
    Title: Embrol
    Genre: YA Science Fiction
    Email: abbyannis(at)earthlink(dot)net

    Hook: For seventeen-year-old Olivia Ryan, stopping a demented alien from trapping her in a dream and taking over her body so he can use her dormant power to hijack the universe from its creator means trusting Jack—the only one with the power to train her to use her abilities, but he’s also the boy who killed her mom.

    Line: She looked deceptively frail, even shorter than me, maybe five feet tall, and her paper-thin skin clung to her bones like plastic wrap.

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  35. Name: Liz Allen
    Title: Nowhere to Hide
    Genre: YA Thriller
    Email: liz_allen1(at)hotmail(dot)com

    Hook: When the police fail to find any evidence of the murder that Penny Haywood claims to have witnessed, strange things start happening in the small town of Lovely, Colorado. At first, the attacks appear to be random. However, Penny discovers a killing pattern that not only includes her own life, but those of her family.
    Line: None of the three victims were related in life, but they will forever be linked in death.

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    1. I like the sound of this premise. And I really like your line. Nice!

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  36. Name: Kevin Winn
    Title: The Citadel
    Genre: YA Dystopia
    Email: kpwinn(at)gmail(dot)com

    Hook: Quinn suspects that he may be murdering the citizens of Sulta. But he isn't entirely sure. After all, he is just following orders from the Citadel, and the Citadel is never wrong.

    Line: With the problems I was causing now, I bet they wished they had killed me instead.

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    1. First of all, I LOVE that you have a male assassin POV and that he's got attitude. I'd totally read this.

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  37. Name: Isabel Bandeira
    Title: The Desired

    Genre: YA Contemporary Fantasy

    Email: c(dot)isabel(dot)bandeira(at)gmail.com

    Hook: There is a place beyond time where people, like Rip Van Winkle and King Arthur, have become trapped for hours, centuries, or millennia. When a lost king asks Sara to save him from this time prison, she has to choose between helping him or believing her best friend, Jer, who was born to guard our world against the imprisoned.

    Line: With a small sound between a gasp and a squeak, I pushed back into the hallway and watched the entire room crumble back to now in a sheet of dust just as the last part of me passed the threshold, the dress disintegrating off of my body in the same moment.

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  38. Name: Rhiann Wynn-Nolet
    Title: Tendril
    Genre: YA Dark Contemporary Magical Realism
    Word count: 68,000
    Email: rhiannwn@yahoo.com

    Hook: Opal’s family heirlooms include albinism, a lecherous uncle, and a curse that says she’ll never find true love. The curse suffers a mortal blow when two brothers, one living and one dead, fall in love with her. But a happy ending requires foiling her uncle’s depraved abduction plot, and choosing between the boys she loves, and life or eternal life.

    Line: Tall willows leaned over the pond, like graceful medieval ladies admiring their own reflections as their long sleeves trailed across its mirrored surface.

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  39. Name: Stacey Wunsch
    Title: Visibly Invisible
    Genre: YA Speculative
    Email: staceywunsch (at) gmail (dot) com

    Hook: Zoey chose not to die. It was a bad decision. Now she must work as a Collector, trasporting expired souls to an underground society, and ethically questionable experimentation.

    Line: She had become a handy little pickpocket over the past five years, though it was never money or possessions she was after – only the tears.

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  40. Austin Light
    Title: The Unfortunate Wishes of Matthew Watson
    Genre: YA Contemporary/supernatural (not romance)
    Email: austindlight(at)outlook(dot)com

    Hook: Former private school star, Matt, uses an aloof genie to get out of his crappy bully-filled public school. But the genie doesn’t use magic, he “makes things happen,” which could also be translated as “ruins everything.” Now Matt’s scrambling to fix his life, avoid a bully and woo a girl, all while his genie is setting buildings on fire for funsies.

    Line: He glanced at Jonah, standing on the toilet with a bewildered look on his face, and checked off "hearing people's thoughts," from his list of possible wishes--that was like a punch to the soul.

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    2. "setting buildings on fire for funsies." --amazing. This reminds me of Jonathan Stroud's Bartimaeus trilogy. I love me a funny genie (or demon).

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    3. Good Luck! I like how you flipped the idea of the Genie around like that.

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  41. Name: Jessica Harvey
    Title: Never the Hero
    Genre: YA Contemporary
    Email: harveyjek(at)my(dot)ccsu(dot)edu

    Hook: Everything nineteen-year-old Krystin knew about her destiny changed the instant her true love, Shawn, almost died by her hands. Accidental or not, that moment isolated her from everyone. But now Krystin must reunite with Shawn, as per her destiny, or risk starting a war between not only Good and Evil, but every faction standing blind and arrogant in between.


    Line: All I saw was a jumbled mess, and that my place in that jumbled mess was ever involuntarily in flux.

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  42. Name: Jennie Bozic
    Title: Damselfly
    Genre: YA Sci Fi
    Email: jennielyndy(at)gmail(dot)com

    Hook: In 2065, the Lilliput Project created Lina - the first six-inch-tall winged girl. Now her creators are forcing her to choose between six guys her size on a reality dating show. Problem is, she’s already fallen in love with a boy she met online - only he has no idea that thumbelina1847 could literally fit inside his heart.

    Line: Those girls laughed and talked too easily, as though they’d popped out of the womb with a bachelor’s

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    3. Somehow the last words of my line got cut off (not sure how, sorry!). It should read -

      Line: Those girls laughed and talked too easily, as though they’d popped out of the womb with a bachelor’s degree in flirtation.

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    4. Ok, I'm back... last time I posted too soon, sorry.

      I think this sounds so awesome. Good luck, enjoy HL&S.

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    5. As someone who has loved Gulliver's Travels since her sophomore year, I was immediately hooked by "Liliput Project" alone! Best of luck!

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    6. I absolutely love your hook and first line! My favorite entry out of all of them on this page. So fresh and interesting!

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  43. Name: Suja Sukumar
    Title: MIRE
    Genre: YA mystery with paranormal elements
    Email: drsujas(at)yahoo(dot)com
    Hook:
    Her alcoholic celebrity mom provides enough drama for Diya, until her aunt's nearly killed by a weapon belonging to her crush. She faces having to turn him in, or believe his warning – that her aunt was just a pawn. The killer wants Diya, and it's centuries long wait for vengeance is connected to the birth family she knew nothing of.
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    Outlined clearly in the dark, a pair of eyes stared at her – the irises a deep blood-red. Delete ReplyReply ForwardSpamMovePrint Actions NextPrevious

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    1. Sorry about this, but the line ought to read :

      Outlined clearly in the dark, a pair of eyes stared at her – the irises a deep blood-red.

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  44. Name: Elizabeth Penney
    Title: Flinch
    Genre: YA Contemporary Thriller
    Email: liz (at) 2penney dot com

    The last weekend of summer turns into a nightmare for four teens targeted by a psychotic small town cop. Someone will die.

    I strolled toward the carnage, the cool fall air caressing my bare skin as it brought the raw mineral scents of blood and gunpowder to my nostrils.

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  45. Name: Vicki Orians
    Title: The Awakening
    Genre: YA Paranormal Romance
    Email: victoria(dot)orians(at)gmail(dot)com

    Hook: A sixteen-year-old foster child with the power to heal is transported to another world where dark creatures roam, having abilities is the norm, and she’s the rightful heir to her mother’s throne – if she can escape the bounty on her head and keep her uncle from destroying her home.

    Line: So what Gerard couldn’t die - maybe that was a good thing, because I was going to cause him so much pain he would wish he was dead.

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  46. Tanya Spencer
    Title: Streetlight
    Genre: YA Thriller
    Email: jt4spencer(at)yahoo(dot)com

    Hook: Turning off streetlights with her mind is a trick fifteen-year-old Logan didn’t know she’d be hunted for. But a group of paranormally-gifted outlaws are hell bent on acquiring Logan’s power. If they catch her, she’ll not only be stripped of her ability, but also her identity – leaving her with no memories of her family, her past or even herself.

    Line: He was completely bald and I couldn’t help myself thinking the top of his head looked like a shiny Milk Dud.

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    2. Posted too soon last time, so I came back... I'm hard to be rid of, what can I say?

      I think your premise is intriguing, but I LOVE the 'line'... MILK DUD, what a great way to describe a bald head. Cracks me up :)

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  47. Name: Shannon Wixom

    Title: The Memorywalker

    Genre: YA Contemporary

    Email: swixom(at)gmail(dot)com

    Hook: Just about anything would be more welcome than what ends up ruining Alexis Ortega's perfect prom, because how does a girl deal with a voice in her head who claims to be herself from the future? The voice, nicknamed the memorywalker, needs Alex to prevent something horrible from happening. If they fail, the future isn’t likely to go happily-ever-after.

    Line: "Mom's already given me more weird looks than a Lady Gaga impersonator."

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  48. Name: Lauren Fobbs

    Title: One of Darker Blood

    Genre: YA Dark Fantasy

    Email: Lfobbs226(at)gmail(dot)com

    Hook: Cursed with the ability to see and touch spirits, sixteen-year-old Fay has been connected to a prophesy telling of one who will annihilate her entire civilization. She has no desire to be known as a killer and will do whatever it takes to fight against her destiny. Unfortunately, she'll have to overcome the racism and hatred from her community, a murder-bent ex crush, and her own violent tendencies first.

    Line: There he was, the rosy color of his eyes shifting like ink dropped into water and sickly beautiful against his radiant fair skin, his mouth curled up only at the corners into a playful grin.

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  49. Name: Brianna R. Shrum
    Title: Corrupted
    Genre: YA Cyberpunk
    E-mail: brianna(dot)shrum(at)yahoo(dot)com

    Hook: When Cyber Hacker Rynn 713 and the boy she illegally loves discover their impending executions, they must flee a nation that tracks their every word and move and fight back with the only weapon Cyber Hackers have: Tech.

    Line: At the carnival, in my secret room, everywhere we had been, in the back of her mind she had known that she was going to kill me.



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  50. Name: Emilyann Girdner
    Title: The Labyrinth Wall
    Genre: YA Epic Fantasy
    Email: emilyanngirdner(at)gmail(dot)com
    Hook: In a dark labyrinth, teenage Araina's isolation is prompted by hate for her fellow savage Mahk and their manipulative creators. Exposure of a Creator secret brings about their attempted masacre of the Mahk. Now Araina must decide if she will trust potentially deceitful allies who could help her reach safety on the other side of the magical labyrinth wall.
    Line: I reach up over my head preparing to take the dagger from my hair so I can lodge it in his pea brain when out of the corner of my eye I see a man burst right out of the labyrinth wall.

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  51. Name: Ladonna Watkins
    Title: Royal Throne
    Genre: YA Steampunk
    Email: qtrdmn(at)aol.com

    Hook: When robots abduct seventeen-year-old Isabell, the king’s personal messenger tells her she’ll bear the heir of the throne as she resembles the future queen who cannot. She soon discovers he wants to assassinate the royal family to assume the throne. Stopping him could grant her freedom; if she fails, she’ll stay a prisoner and become the assassin’s queen.

    Line: “Call me a chocolate cupcake again, and I’ll take my dagger and gut you like a wild hog.”

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  52. Kelly Allan
    Fade Into You
    YA Contemporary
    kellyallanwriter (at) gmail.com

    Hook:

    Kenzie, a drifter who resists friends, meets Mags, a mentally unstable Valedictorian. Mags needs a live-in caregiver who can keep her from hurting herself and her unborn baby--Kenzie's ex-boyfriend's baby. A deep-seeded and unexpected friendship forces Kenzie to choose between living carefree and staying to face demons that aren't just her own.

    Line:

    The gray atmosphere of Indianapolis was sticky and stifling, especially after our frequent relocations between small towns, where the skies were usually a clear blue during the day and, at night, a spectacle of stars.

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    1. I don't usually read things that sound this scary, but I am intrigued. Maybe it's because of Indianapolis...

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    2. Very interesting premise. I would read :)

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  53. Name: Kelley Harvey
    Title: DEVASTATION
    Genre: YA Romantic (Soft)Sci-Fi
    Word Count: 94,000
    Email: contactme(at)kelleyharvey(dot)com

    Hook:
    At sixteen, Lexa, who’s mortified of heights, learns she’s half alien and sprouts giant-ass wings. She’s abducted by genocidal aliens, for her regenerative DNA, and kept in a stinking, dark spaceship with a slimy, bloodthirsty beast. She'll have to overcome her phobia and fly to freedom or stay trapped with the slimy bastard and end up light years from home.

    Line:
    Through clenched teeth, I said, “Gabe Michaels, if you don’t hand me my top in two seconds, I’ll be handin’ you your plums in about ten.”

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    1. Sounds good! Is the novel an extended metaphor of Beauty and the Beast?

      Good Luck!

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    2. OOH! Am I so happy to be a beta reader on this one! *happy dance* I may be biased - but pick this one everyone. It's AWESOME!

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    3. Aw, Book Omnivore, you are just so kind! And an awesome beta BTW :)

      K.L. - not a Beauty and the Beast, this beast doesn't have ANY redeeming qualities unfortunately for my MC - but fortunate for my readers :) - Although... maybe you're on to something there... if you don't want to write it, maybe I will *waggles eyebrows*

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    4. I love your line!
      Also, I think the word you want is horrified, not mortified. Unless she is feeling humiliated or embarrassed.
      Good luck!

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  54. Name: Rachel Horwitz
    Title: Havoc's Knot
    Genre: YA Epic Fantasy
    Email: rachel(dot)horwitz7(@)gmail(dot)com

    Hook: Jake had no idea a trip to the local museum would change him from wallflower to warrior. When he accidentally steals the place of another boy, he also takes on a prophecy not intended for him. Now he must defeat the wolf king if he ever wants to see home again, or keep the people he loves alive.

    Line: If his pulse wasn't tearing through his veins, and his stomach wasn't squirming, or he wasn't trying to swallow a ramphibian, Jake had no idea how to tell if he was feeling anything anymore.

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    1. I've read this somewhere before... in another contest... doesn't the MC draw or something? I may just be getting that mixed up with something else.

      Good luck! I think it sounds good.

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  55. Name: Erin Flaaen
    Title: Damaged Graffiti
    Genre: YA dystopian
    Email: eflaaen(at)aol(dot)com

    Hook: Alixe, a seventeen-year-old orphan, has one fear: adoption by a predator, meaning immediate sex slavery. Despite her efforts to escape, she finds herself in the custody of one of the most notorious predators, but his demands are different from most. She is ordered to kill for him, and if she does not succeed, she will be the one to die.

    Line: The outside was still beautiful, even though it was worn away, but I only ever saw its beauty when I was in the back of a cop car.

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  56. Name: John Krissilas
    Title: 151
    Genre: YA sci-fi/fantasy
    Email: john(at)johnkrissilas(dot)com

    Hook:
    Seventeen-year-old Aeneas doesn't belong to a Colony. When the band of pirates that raised him is slaughtered in cold blood, he finds himself lost, on the run, and worst of all, alone. Then he meets Casseopea, a beautiful girl from the Colonies, and he must decide whether to help her rebel against her Chieftain, or run away for good.

    Line:
    "I’m on my way out of Ilium, away from this place once and for all, not on my way to setting anyone free."

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  57. Name: Kate Clary
    Title: EISLEY
    Genre: YA Speculative
    Word Count: 80,000
    Email: kateknows(at)gmail(dot)com

    Hook: Seventeen-year-old Juliet Eisley is a genetically engineered loner without much hope of a future - until she teams up with misanthropic medical genius Quinn Aldrick. Now she's integral to a plan to save thousands of genetically Modified people, and she feels like part of a family again. But could she be the unwilling subject of her new mentor's ultimate experiment?

    Line: On the day Aldrick got me, I'd painted my fingernails blue.

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  58. Name: Stephen West
    Title: Airship City
    Genre: YA alternative history
    Email: stephen(dot)west(at)mac(dot)com

    Hook: Fifteen-year-old Joseph Samson gets the chance to go to Aeropolis, an amazing flying city built by Howard Hughes. But he's there to spy on Hughes and find out who killed his father. When he falls for Hughes's daughter, he faces some difficult choices, and finally a race against time to prevent a madman from destroying Aeropolis.

    Line: "You can rely on very little, other than that you are sure to find people who don't have the things others do, because they lose what little they did have, or never got anything in the first place."

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  59. Name: Melissa Gorzelanczyk
    Title: THE CHANNELS
    Genre: YA Paranormal
    Email: melissa(at)peaceandprojects(dot)com

    Hook:

    What if you knew people’s darkest secrets? Sixteen-year-old Hannah Clare can hear people’s thoughts, but a family history of mental illness creates a fine line between what is delusion and what is paranormal. Only Colin’s touch can make the voices melt away, but Hannah’s already heard the one secret she can’t keep: Colin’s cousin is stalking his next prey.

    Line:

    Silence has a sound.

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    1. Love the premise! I do wish your hook hadn't started with a question, but I am really taken with the idea that the MC has reason to think her ability might actually be mental illness. Good luck!

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  60. Name: Melissa Marino

    Title: CRUMBLE

    Genre: YA Contemporary
    Email: melmelissa228(at)gmail(dot)com

    


Hook: Emma is desperate to keep a family history of mental illness at bay, but discovers love will drive her a different kind of crazy. Emma’s crafted an ideal life, sure it’ll protect her from the monster that stole her sister: schizophrenia. Perfection goes according to plan until partnered with Gavin in class, and he chips away at her meticulous exterior.




    Line: In a place where people were fighting for the lives, I was desperate to find mine.

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  61. Name: Amelia Priestley
    Title: Radio Hearts
    Genre: Contemporary YA
    Subgenre: Supernatural
    E-mail: curiositywaits(at)gmail(dot)com

    Hook: When eighteen-year old pastry chef Junie Conway meets a mysterious popstar on the run, she concocts a plan to save her late father's restaurant from foreclosure―if she doesn’t fall in love with him first.

    Line: "What matters is making the choices you can live with."

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  62. Name: Camilla Laurel
    Title: THE BACK UP SINGER
    Genre: Young Adult Contemporary
    Email: camillalaurel(at)gmail(dot)com

    Hook:
    Backup singer, Riley Stone, is hiding a secret. She’s the real voice behind her step-sisters’ famous pop band. When teen pop sensation, Zach Charming, invites the band on his tour, the lies surrounding her unravel and she has her chance at the spotlight. YA contemporary Cinderella retelling.

    LINE:
    “Most pop stars are assholes--I should know, I live with two of the biggest ones to ever walk the face of the earth,” Riley said.

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    1. This sounds like a lot of fun! Good luck :)

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    2. Love the Cinderella retelling with the "ghostsinger" premise.

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    3. This sounds really cute! Reminds me of a Disney Channel movie with the girl from Pretty Little Liars, which was adorable. Good luck with this!!

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    4. Love this idea, and fairytale retellings are super hot right now. Best of luck to you!

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  63. Name: Katie Teller
    Title: Kiya: Hope of the Pharaoh
    Genre: YA Historical Romance
    Email: katiejteller (at) hotmail (dot) com

    Hook:

    To save her younger sisters from being taken, Naomi steps in to be a wife of the erratic Pharaoh. As Naomi rises through the ranks of the wives, the Queen Nefertiti seeks to destroy her. But when Naomi conceives the Pharaoh's child, Nefertiti’s lust for blood is turned against her.

    Line:
    “Oh yes (Naomi), make (the Pharaoh) love you, make him hold you in his highest regard."

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  64. Name: Dannie Morin
    Title: Imperfectly Fine
    Genre: YA Contemporary (with Thriller elements)
    Word Count: 56,000
    Email: dannie(dot)morin(dot)writes(at)gmail (dot) com

    Hook: After her rockstar father is murdered, Skylar Benson must do the one thing she never expected: survive. Orphaned and terminally ill with cystic fibrosis, she seeks distraction in Cole Monroe, a boy her friends despise. But Skylar knows Cole is dangerous--she's counting on it.

    Line: Then there's my nebulizer, this super sexy breathing treatment mask that makes me look like I'm part plastic elephant.

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    1. LOVE this live. I just. I love it.

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    2. Not sure of the hook, but LOVE, LOVE, LOVE the line!

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    3. I love your sense of humor.

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    4. I have to agree with Book Omnivore (I do that frequently). The hook is interesting, with the CF, but really unsure how dangerous is helpful for suviving. Of course, 60 words makes it tough.

      I LOVE THE LINE THOUGH - just like everyone else!

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    5. That is a fantastic hook.

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    6. Love the line (I mean I *really* love it). I'm wondering why she's counting on Cole being dangerous, though.

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  65. NAME: Sharon Johnston

    TITLE: Sleeper

    GENRE: YA Speculative Fiction (Science Fiction/Urban Fantasy mix)

    EMAIL: smjohnston [@] live[dot]com[dot]au

    HOOK: Mishca is a sleeper soldier with a weak heart. She has no idea that a life saving heart transplant accidentally triggered her programming. In the search for answers, she discovers the truth and that her creator, Wirth, has classified her remaining "sisters" from her experiment group as defective, scheduling them for termination. Mishca decides to save them before they're eliminated.

    LINE: “How can you be sure of your emotions and desires when you love with a heart that belongs to someone else?”

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  66. Name: Jenny Coon Peterson
    Title: UNDERTOW
    Genre: YA contemporary fantasy
    Email: jen.coonpeterson(at)gmail(dot)com

    HOOK:
    After her mom is burned to death by a mysterious woman, 17-year-old Bea Shepherd races to uncover a power her elemental warlock family buried on a remote island. If Bea can’t discover exactly where it’s buried and how to harness it before the killer, she and her brother will be the next to die. But Bea will bring the whole island down before she lets anyone hurt her family again.

    LINE:
    It was the last week of September, and the first flurries of snow brushed like cat whiskers against the school windows.

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  67. Name: Catherine Scully
    Title: Jennifer Strange
    Genre: YA Paranormal Horror
    Word Count: 55,000
    Email: CatherineScully.Writer@gmail.com

    Hook:
    Marcus Blackwell is next in line to lead his Ghost Hunter family if he can find a powerful Medium. While on assignment to locate a ghost child, Marcus stumbles on Jennifer Strange’s unique ability to touch ghosts. Despite Jennifer’s denial in the supernatural, Marcus must help her trust her budding abilities to save his family from a soul-eating wraith.

    Line:
    The only thing I could hear over the roaring gale was the piercing cry of my mother’s screams and the crunch of snapping bones.

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    1. I'm normally not into paranormal, but your hook, well, hooked me. The idea of touching ghosts is so interesting. Plus, Jennifer Strange -- such a rad name (and title).

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    2. I love paranormal horror and would definitely read this!

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  68. Name: Adele Edwards
    Title: HUNTING SEASON
    Genre: YA Thriller/Sci-Fi
    Email: sedward2(at)lakeheadu(dot)ca

    Hook:

    Fifty years from now, Earth is safe, except for once a decade when an alien race is allowed free-range on the human species. For Charlie, the president's daughter, safety isn't an issue as she is off-limits. But when she learns a horrifying secret about the hunt, she teams up with a Hybrid to end the fight once and for all.

    Line:

    "We all wait patiently, staring out the window as the first red leaf falls off the tree and hits the ground; it has begun."

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    1. Oh, I really like the premise of this one.

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    2. Such a vidid and frighteningly magical line!

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    3. Oh, I LURVE ALIENS and HYBRIDS! And HUNTING SEASON, love the title and premise... imagine the terror of the weeks working up to it and durring season. WOW. Need a beta?

      The line is great too btw.

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    4. I'm not sure which is better, the hook or the line. What a way to throw down the gauntlet!

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    5. Thank you for the great feedback guys! I am humbled and really appreciate it. And Kelley, you are welcome to send me an email about the beta thing :).

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  69. Name: Rebecca Yarros
    Title: AEOLIAN
    Genre: YA Urban Fantasy
    Email: Rebecca.e.yarros@gmail.com

    Hook: With Elemental powers, Dayenara is ready to protect the innocent as the descendant of a hidden society, but accepting her birthright means embracing the destiny she’s scorned, she’ll rip apart everything she's come to love in the name of free will.

    Line: I don’t care how hot he is, no guy is worth throwing yourself off a cliff.

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    1. Thanks, SM Johnson! I wish I hadn't been in such a hurry typing though, totally left of the "but WHEN accepting" in my Hook... EEEK! ;)

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    2. LOVE the line.
      The hook seems somewhat vague to me though, I can't really get a grasp on what the stakes are (free will to do what?), could just be me. But LOVE the line, really I do.

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  70. Whitney D. Grandison13 October 2012 at 18:19

    Name: Whitney D. Grandison
    Title: Resisting Rhys
    Genre: YA Contemporary
    Email: wdgrandison(at)gmail(dot)com
    Hook: In the game of manipulation, someone’s about to get played, and all rules are about to be broken.

    Line: He was a self-confessed sadist and I…was his martyr.

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    1. YA contemporary is in demand at the moment. However, it's hard to tell what this one is about with the Hook. The maximum amount you could use was 60 words and three lines - it would have been good for you to have taken advantage of that and shown us more of your story. Maximise your opportunities - just something to thing about for future competitions.

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    2. Whitney D. Grandison14 October 2012 at 03:31

      Ah, I saw that after I posted it. I always figured hooks were single sentences, but perhaps I should've elaborated more. Ah well, darn, haha

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  71. Name: Kaylie Austen
    Title: Singularity
    Genre: YA sci-fi
    Email: kaylieeausten(at)gmail(dot)com

    Hook: Romeo and Juliet meets Battlestar Galactica: Jules, the last cyborg, must save her ship from an alien invasion, but her feelings for a human overpowers hard-wired programming. She must decide between dying to save her home or risking everything for love.

    Line: Holy crap she was heavy and not big girl heavy, but half-made-of-metal heavy!

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    1. CYBORGS!!! I might be biased because my WIP includes Cyborgs, but CYBORGS!!! I think this one sounds really cool and I love your pitch. I think SciFi is going to make a resurgence, too.

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    2. This sounds fantastic! I particularly love the cyborg loving a human thing. The line is great too! Good luck!

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    3. I love the pitch/idea for this book and your line has me eager to read more!

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  72. Name: Jessica Montgomery
    Title: Blood and Honor
    Genre: YA High Fantasy
    Email: jess.montgomery2(at)gmail(dot)com

    Hook: Sixteen year old Bramlyn Shadowborne is dethroned for lacking all the wicked parts necessary to rule her land. In fear of her life, she runs to the only place that will save her, one of the Nine Kingdoms of Light. War is coming, and she must chose between her dark homeland or the kingdom that gave her sanctuary.

    Line: He supposed he could just walk up to her and say, 'hey, I know we just met, but I'm going to have to kill you now.'

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  73. Name: Ariel Miller
    Title: MINDSIGHT
    Genre: YA Thriller/Fantasy
    Email: arieljking(at)yahoo(dot)com

    Hook: Seventeen-year-old Shilah can see the future - only the future she sees is her own murder. In search for answers, she discovers she is the missing link to a formula responsible for creating her ability. In order to keep the formula from a powerful company, she must destroy it, even if it means facing her murderer.

    Line: Now that my death was approaching, it became clear, regardless of supernatural abilities life wasn’t a fairytale with happy endings.

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  74. Name: Erik DeLapp
    Title: Tantalum
    Genre: YA Fantasy
    Email: erikdelapp@gmail.com

    Hook:
    n the city of Tantalum, fifteen-year-old Celeste lived as an orphan mage until a government blood test exposed her as a witch. Ripped from her home, Celeste is sent to the Witch Genome Project, a place to "cure" witches. But as Celeste unravels its secrets, she discovers a conspiracy threatening all peoples of Tantalum, forcing her to face life-or-death decisions.

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    "No ammo, rusted beyond use, probably been sitting here as long as you’ve been able to form complex thoughts--maybe six months.”

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    1. The phrase "Witch Genome Project" is great. Love the line!

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  75. Name: Heather RIffle
    Title: Terra Incognita
    Genre: YA Post-Apocalyptic Paranormal
    Email: heather(dot)sizemore1(at)gmail(dot)com

    Hook: Seventeen-year old Haylee Wells stumbles through a portal into a post-apocalyptic future and discovers she has a knack for healing and an aptitude for seeing auras. But when the immortal Pale Ones covet her power, she must return home or risk enslavement.

    Line: "We always catch you."

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    1. I think this is a really unique concept. It has a dystopia feel without being part of the trend. Nice.

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  76. Name: Sarah J. Clift
    Title: MY HERCULES
    Genre: YA contemporary
    Email: sjc {at} sarahjclift {dot} com

    Hook: Hercules is a fetus who just wants to be born. His seventeen-year-old mother, Charlotte Stacy, has to decide twice whether to let him live: first when she discovers she’s pregnant and again when doctors recommend terminating the pregnancy as an act of mercy because Hercules is fatally deformed.

    Line: She listed you on Craigslist under the “baby & kid stuff” section for free.

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    1. Sarah, I think you were one of the free pass to the next round winners! Check the post before this one :-)

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    3. I was, but they said I could post here to receive feedback on my entry. Thanks though!

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    4. Love your line. Also your fascinating premise. I'll keep an eye out for this one.

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